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Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other

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In article <nsdirg5mbr2ffnvkkflaqvdq1j343ngf04@4ax.com>,
Capuchin  <Capuchin@jymes.com> wrote:
>On Wed, 15 Dec 2021 06:59:39 +1300, Titus G <noone@nowhere.com> wrote:
>
>>On 14/12/21 3:58 pm, Capuchin wrote:
>>> The blackjack dealer slid a card from the shoe to the square in front
>>> of me and then took one for herself. My other knew I had a queen and
>>> she a six, but to maintain my disguise as a normal person, I lifted
>>> the corner of mine for a quick peek. The next cards, dealt face up,
>>> were an eight for me and a jack for her. 
>>> [Snip]
>>> *****
>>> I don't want to capitalize 'other' or call it 'the other' because that
>>> seems trite. Does it work this way?
>>
>>For me, yes.
>>
>>> I also don't want to do an "as you know, Bob" about its traits and
>>> peculiarities, and/or what he does to keep it hidden. Is the idea here
>>> as plain as I would like to think it is?
>>> 
>>> What would you do different?
>>
>>Nothing. It worked brilliantly for me on first read.
>
>Thanks! On the positive side, no one so far has said it's word salad .
>. .

Oh, no.  It's perfectly intelligible prose.

Now go write the rest of it.

-- 
Dorothy J. Heydt
Vallejo, California
djheydt at gmail dot com
Www.kithrup.com/~djheydt/

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[Crit] and discussion -- My Other Capuchin <Capuchin@jymes.com> - 2021-12-13 20:58 -0600
  Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other djheydt@kithrup.com (Dorothy J Heydt) - 2021-12-14 14:38 +0000
    Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other Capuchin <Capuchin@jymes.com> - 2021-12-14 10:27 -0600
      Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other djheydt@kithrup.com (Dorothy J Heydt) - 2021-12-14 16:51 +0000
        Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other Capuchin <Capuchin@jymes.com> - 2021-12-14 18:27 -0600
      Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other Don <g@crcomp.net> - 2021-12-14 17:29 +0000
        Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other Capuchin <Capuchin@jymes.com> - 2021-12-14 18:32 -0600
        Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other Joy Beeson <jbeeson@invalid.net.invalid> - 2021-12-18 22:48 -0500
          Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other Capuchin <Capuchin@jymes.com> - 2021-12-22 18:00 -0600
  Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other Titus G <noone@nowhere.com> - 2021-12-15 06:59 +1300
    Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other Capuchin <Capuchin@jymes.com> - 2021-12-14 18:34 -0600
      Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other djheydt@kithrup.com (Dorothy J Heydt) - 2021-12-15 01:20 +0000
        Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other Capuchin <Capuchin@jymes.com> - 2021-12-15 16:00 -0600
          Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other djheydt@kithrup.com (Dorothy J Heydt) - 2021-12-16 02:03 +0000
        Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other Titus G <noone@nowhere.com> - 2021-12-16 15:37 +1300
          Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other Capuchin <Capuchin@jymes.com> - 2021-12-16 16:37 -0600
    Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other BCFD36 <bcfd36@cruzio.com> - 2021-12-15 16:27 -0800
      Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other Capuchin <Capuchin@jymes.com> - 2021-12-15 19:03 -0600
        Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other "Gary R. Schmidt" <grschmidt@acm.org> - 2021-12-16 13:10 +1100
          Re: [Crit] and discussion -- My Other Capuchin <Capuchin@jymes.com> - 2021-12-16 16:35 -0600

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